Last night,on 31stDecember 2013.I had a wonderful
time.My aunt and I went to the Phrapathom Chedi temple.There was a bad traffic
jam.We arrived at the temple at 10:30 p.m. It was fantastic and crowded.We
prayed for about 2 hours.There are many people joined countdown.The weather was
very cool. At the midnight,we saw fireworks,It was very interesting and
beautiful.Then,we did some sightseeing around the temple,took a lot of
photos,and ate some great food.After we
finished praying,I went to home at 2:00a.m.I going to sleep.
The Next day,my aunt and I woke up
early.We rode a motorbike to the temple and to make merit.After that I bought
chocolates and cookies for myfriend.I thought,I will bring to her in the new
year's day.In the evening,my sister and I went to the market and bought
shrimp,octopus,fish,and beverages.My family and I cooked the food.We had dinner.We
had fun and I felt happy.
I think your text is interesting. Your activities were similar me. :)
ตอบลบYour essay is interesting and nice. I think you happy and enjoy when you go to this place and your writing or grammar are good too.
ตอบลบI like your activities beceuse it is good and interesting.But, your text organization is only about your activities, not suggest your readers because you wrote it in paragrapg writing not essay,right? In addition, I found that you have a little bit about grammar.So, I would like to advice my ideas; for example, we went back home at 2.00 a.m. and went to bed, we rode a motorbike to the temple to make merit, we were fun, and I felt happy. However, your idea is good, and I understand what you want to tell me about your activities. Finally, I'm sorry for my comment if it made you feel bad, but I would like you write it better and better next time. Thank you for sharing your idea. I think you can write it better. Fighting!!!♥ sincerely...
ตอบลบ*paragraph writing
ตอบลบ*I found that you mistook a little bit about grammar